4.3.09

The Editor - Enjoy.

For our second installment featuring tasty little bits of the awful writing I read each day, I thought you'd "enjoy" the following series, all of which occurred in a single 300-word article.
"You can also enjoy more energy which will allow you to enjoy your favorite sports. You will be able to also enjoy your hobbies and other activities. You may also enjoy emotional and spiritual health."

"Likely if you enjoy good health..."

"Because you are happier when you enjoy good health..."

"No one enjoys being sick. Good health is much preferred but how important is good health? Is it important or do we just enjoy it?"

"If good health is maintained it can be enjoyed on into your old age."

13 comments:

  1. It makes for an enjoyable drinking game.

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  2. I taught in Vietnam for a while and it sounds like something one of my students would write....

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  3. i think this writer might enjoy a thesaurus. i find mine to be quite enjoyable, when i'm looking for enjoyment.

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  4. OK, OK. Not everyone's a Longfellow. Look for hidden gems underneath the lackluster prose.

    I, for one, am happier when I enjoy good health.

    Aren't you?

    See?

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  5. Reminds me of Freshman Rhetoric students I used to tutor. Or Seminary students who never wrote papers in undergrad.

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  6. I really enjoyed reading this enjoyable article by a person who apparently enjoys criticizing the writing styles others enjoy.

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  7. I don't understand what's wrong with it? I rather enjoyed it.

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  8. Well done, darlings! This is what the BWC is all about.

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  9. Health can lead to better health, and better health keeps us even healthier. I don't know about you but I sense being sick is the anti-health.

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  10. So, Jordan, I pay you good money to edit my work and you post it here. I thought there was a sacre bond between writer and editor. This sacred bond is the holy glue that creates the adhesion that is the sacred bond. Without the sacred bond there is only me and a lap top, hiding from you, the man lacking an awareness of the metaphoric Gorilla glue.

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  11. oops-a-daisy. someone's dipping his toes in the pools of assholia.
    watch yer step, man. someone trusted you with that shit.

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  12. Ouch! Slicingly said, Angela. In my defense, it is not that clear cut. But I appreciate the reminder.

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